Sunday, March 16, 2014

Soldier

Here is Taiala's imaginary account of being a soldier in the war.  She has used Google Draw to publish it.


13 comments:

Mr Webb and Room 1, Auroa Primary School said...

Taiala
I think that you did a great job of conveying war and how it wasn't very nice. I think it was important that you wrote about the details of it, and also included the pictures at the bottom which helped give it some age and set the scene for it.
Mr Webb and Room One, Auroa Primary School, Taranaki. mrwebbauroa.blogspot.com

constance said...

Wow Taiala you did a very good job.

diziah said...

I like the way you put images of soldiers so we know what its about. And next time you should write more words in your sentence.

faith said...

I like the way that you pot fulstop.

Trent said...

I like you have cool phoths.

Jadaleigh said...

WELL DONE taiala you done a nice job on your story and you have very nice
photo.

Helen said...

nice work taiala

Miss Kyla said...

We liked the way you had lots of information about what happened during the war. You used really great vocabulary when you were describing the soldier's feelings. Next time, you could try adding more adjectives to make it even better!

jahrell said...

WOW done Taiala I like the way you wrote a story about war.

Cerenity said...

This is a great story.

WELL DONE

cornelius said...

I like the way you put people in your story

cornelius said...

I like the way you put people in your story

Cerenity said...

I like the way you used powerful words in your story.